Honestly you should fix the issue with the intro. You're channel is still in the very early stages, so newcomers are going to see the intro, and just click off assuming the rest of the video is like that. If it was like the outtro that was the mistake, you could get away with it, but first impressions are probably the most important thing when you're trying to prove yourself on youtube.
The video itself wasn't too bad, but I think you might want to work on the commentary a bit more. You tend to ramble on about the same topic. Like I think you mentioned how you wanted to do daily uploads like a dozen times throughout the video. Also have a bit more confidence in yourself, you made a joke during the bumper cars section, and I actually thought it was funny, but then you immediately after say "ohh that was cringey" and in my opinion it wasn't cringey until you pointed it out. If you ever feel like something is too cringey, just edit it out, no harm in that.
Keep it up though, this is one of the better LP series I've seen from small channels, It actually looks like you put effort into these which is a good thing. Keep working at it, and you'll get alot of subs, Sonic games are very popular for LPers.