Lovely clean intro, definitely hooks you at the start of the video.
Commentary could do with improvement, remember all pauses and stutters can be trimmed out.
One other thing, the gameplay could be cut down, it felt like some parts shouldn't have been in the video as there wasn't much action, you could also do with getting an new outro, ask the person who made your intro to do it.
Apart from that, keep it up!
Many Thanks,
Ben Moughton (BenMo)